Sunday, March 1, 2015

A Step in the Write Direction, March 2, 2015--Verbs, Adverbs

A Step in the Write Direction
March 2, 2015
Update: Last week was one of those “Oh God, not again” week. My husband fell on his back in our driveway Wednesday and had emergency surgery on Thursday. The doctor asked him if he really wanted it, and pointed out all the risks: Coumadin, heart problems, diabetes, etc. Could be paralyzed during the procedure, have a heart attack or stroke, etc. The option: a back brace and wheelchair for the rest of his life, perhaps ending up paralyzed and losing use of bodily functions. He said that with Gary’s soft bones (osteoporosis) it would be like putting screws into a Styrofoam cup, and that it would be a 7-hour surgery. Turned out to be 5 hours, and he told Gary the next day that he was lucky to be alive and for his legs and feet to be moving. A surgical nurse told our son, “Your dad must be a fighter as that was one of the toughest surgeries I’ve ever assisted on.”

Today’s update: He still is having trouble swallowing, so they’re putting in a temporary feeding tube through the nose and will take a swallowing test tomorrow. Also, because of something on the EKG, they took a heart ultrasound today to check on the blood clot he has. They’ll get him up tomorrow, using a back brace (which he’ll wear for the next 3-6 months).When he’s ready, he’ll go to a care center for rehab. Doctor said it’ll take 9 months to a year for the bones to fuse.

Thought for the Day: “Whatever you do, work at it with all your heart, as working for the Lord, not for human masters, since you know that you will receive an inheritance from the Lord as a reward. It is the Lord Christ you are serving” (Colossians 3:23-24).

Song for the Day:
Now I’ve giv’n to Jesus ev’rything;
Now I gladly own Him as my king;
Now my raptured soul can only sing
Of Calvary.
            William R. Newell, “At Calvary”

Joke for the Day: A teacher, in discussing different religions, asked her students to bring in something representing their faith. A Jewish student brought in a menorah, a Catholic girl brought in a rosary, and a Baptist boy brought in a casserole dish.

Writer’s Tips:             More “Show, Don’t Tell”

Don't Overuse Adverbs

            Replace two adverbs with one strong verb.
*          He walked wearily and laboriously.
            He trudged.
*          "I think you'd better go now," he said angrily. Let your words show anger: "Get out of here and never come back!" he said.


            Okay: "She closed the kitchen window."
            Better: "She slammed the kitchen window."

            Okay:  "Fran looked at her husband across the table."
            Better: "She stared or glared or gazed at her husband."

            Okay: "Judy came into the room where her friend sat..."
            Better: "Judy burst into the room..."
                        “Judy stomped into the room.
                        “Judy tiptoed into the room.”

            Okay: "Jesus was sad."
            Better: "Jesus wept."

            Okay:   “Judy said to her husband.”
            Better: “Judy yelled at her husband.”

            Okay:   He walked through the water. 
            Better:            He sloshed through the water. (picture of a puddle)
                        He waded through the water. (picture of deep water)

            Okay:   He walked down the hall.
            Better: He darted through the crowded corridor.

            Okay:   She picked up the package.
            Better:            She grabbed the package.

Have a good week spreading the
gospel through the printed page.

Donna Clark Goodrich

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