A Step in the Write Direction
March 10,
2014
Update: It’s been quite an
interesting week: Tuesday I took my sister out for her 83rd
birthday… Wednesday I took the light
rail into Phoenix and met my “bestest” friend at the Spaghetti Factory (she
drove in from Sun City). She’s taking a new drug for hepatitis C which leaves
her quite fatigued, but we had a good visit…Thursday I spoke at a PrimeTimers
luncheon (seniors) at a nearby church on “The Freedom of Letting Go,” and gave
the same talk Saturday at a Woman’s Wellness Day, and also a talk on “Your Four
Selves” (what you think you are, what others think you are, what you really are,
and what you can be with God’s help). Had to leave partway through for another funeral at our church…Just
finished proofreading a 147-page book and have two income taxes to do tomorrow,
then I think this week will be a little quieter. But who knows? Oh yes, my hubby
took another fall last night—scraped his knees (which we have to watch carefully
as he’s had MRSA on one of his knees from another fall), and also his left hand
is swollen and bruised, so will keep an eye on that. It’s never dull at our
house!!
Thought for the Day: Learn from
the mistakes of others. You can’t live long enough to make them all yourself
(Eleanor Roosevelt).
Laugh for the Day: An elderly woman, never
married, requested no male pallbearers. In her handwritten instructions for her
memorial service, she wrote, “They wouldn't take me out while I was alive, I
don't want them to take me out when I'm dead.”
Song for the Day:
All the talents I have I
have laid at Thy feet;
Thy approval shall be my
reward.
Be my store great or small,
I surrender it all
To my wonderful, wonderful
Lord.
—Haldor Lillenas, My
Wonderful Lord,
Writer’s Tips – Strong
verbs
Okay: She closed the kitchen
window.
Better: She slammed the
kitchen window.
Okay: Fran looked at her husband across the
table.
Better: "She stared or
glared or gazed at her husband" (depending on her mood).
Okay: Judy came into the room
where her friend sat...
Better: Judy burst into the
room..."
Okay: Judy walked into the room.
Better: Judy stomped
(noisily??) into the room (don’t need adverb—stomped is noisy)
Judy tiptoed
(quietly??) into the room (don’t need adverb—tiptoed is quiet)
Okay: Jesus was sad.
Better: Jesus wept.
Okay: Judy said to her husband.
Better: Judy yelled at her
husband.
Okay: He walked through the water.
Better: He sloshed through the water. (picture
of a puddle)
He waded through
the water. (picture of deep water)
Okay: He walked down the hall.
Better: He darted through the
crowded corridor.
Okay: She picked up the package.
Better: She grabbed the package.
Paint
a picture with your words so your readers can see what’s happening!
Have a good week spreading
the
gospel through
the printed page.
Donna Clark
Goodrich
dgood648@aol.com
www.thewritersfriend.net
http://donna-goodrich.blogspot.com
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